I feel that you make a very good point on how the economic-downturn is contributing to the weight gain of US students, however I feel as though this is an informative letter rather than argumentative. You need to make a definite stance/ opinion on the claim that you make. After reading this post I was unsure if you believed that the economic-downture was, infact, the reason students are gaining weight. A way to fix this is to conclude with a statement rather than a question.
I feel that you make a very good point on how the economic-downturn is contributing to the weight gain of US students, however I feel as though this is an informative letter rather than argumentative. You need to make a definite stance/ opinion on the claim that you make. After reading this post I was unsure if you believed that the economic-downture was, infact, the reason students are gaining weight. A way to fix this is to conclude with a statement rather than a question.
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